the creepy wonderland

This week we have been learning to create a piece of of writing using a picture to helps us. First we had a class brainstormed on what picture was about, then we brainstormed some adjectives. Finally we started our writing. I am sharing it with you, please leave me a comment. thanks!

                                  The creepy wonderland birthday

One day me and my family moved to pic ton. For the holidays for like about 2 years and me and my family also went because my friend just moved to pic ton. Because she was always getting bullied so there family moved to pic ton. She had hips of new friends and me and my friend asked if my family could move to pic ton. Please mum because i am getting bullied all the time.

Yes! Yeah rose said. Rose asked if i can go  to my friends school and mu said yes and to my friends birthday it is on saturday and because today was the day that i was going to ask  you if we can move to pic ton please mum can we move to pic ton yes we can move to pic ton and move schools because everyone hates you and no one is your friend at hornby primary school. Everyone was just so mean every day when i arrive to school everyone says i hate you rose.

They always say that name is the worst. please mum can we move to pic ton yes we can move to pic ton yeah! This is going to be the best school.

Can i please go to my friend’s school so i can always see my bff install she moves schools when she was really rose was really happy at that school everyone wanted to be my friend my bff’s name is called te taonga me and te taonga where a year 5 me and te taonga were both 8 years old and are birthdays are the same years but on are birthdays them thing appears up at are birthdays so me and are friends run inside cause and they look creepy they look like died people so we all finished the party inside because we had some xtra birthday stuff then we lived happily ever arfter.