I am a student in the Uru Mānuka Cluster. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first drafts. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Hello Nevaeh, It is Bridget here from Yaldhurst Model School/Rimu Class. This blog post stood out to me because you gave a discription and you also added a picture as well. I think that you did great. I don't think that there is any thing to improve on. But I do have a question, did you make this all by yourself? But other than that Ka Pai Bridget
Hello Nevaeh.I like the characters you have used in your story.Just remember that you still need to use capital letters at the start.What do you like most about being early to school?.I like getting to school early so I can spend some time playing games with children before the bell goes.
Hello Neveah, my name is Parwin and I am a year 8 from Yaldhurst Model School.
I really liked the pictures that you have used as they are all very colourful and creative. I also like how you have set everything up very well too. The first image, could you make the eyes closed? If so, then maybe you could do that to make it even better!
This reminds me of something like this which I also saw and it was very similar to the one that you have done, probably because your class had to do it. Could you have picked something else apart from getting ready for school? If so, why did you pick to do this topic?
I think that to improve, maybe you could add something that you had found challenging or something that you enjoyed the most!
Kia Ora Nevaeh,
ReplyDeletemy name is Julia and I am a year 8 student from Yaldhurst Model School.
Ka Pai! I really enjoyed reading you storyboard and it looks and sounds very cool. Where did you get your storyline from?
This reminded me of when I had to do something similar. You did it much better than me.
To improve, all I can say is add why you did this and maybe how you could improve next time.
Apart from that, amazing post!
Kind Regards
Julia
Yaldhurst Model School
Hello Nevaeh,
ReplyDeleteIt is Bridget here from Yaldhurst Model School/Rimu Class. This blog post stood out to me because you gave a discription and you also added a picture as well. I think that you did great. I don't think that there is any thing to improve on. But I do have a question, did you make this all by yourself?
But other than that
Ka Pai
Bridget
Hello Nevaeh.I like the characters you have used in your story.Just remember that you still need to use capital letters at the start.What do you like most about being early to school?.I like getting to school early so I can spend some time playing games with children before the bell goes.
ReplyDeleteHello Neveah, my name is Parwin and I am a year 8 from Yaldhurst Model School.
ReplyDeleteI really liked the pictures that you have used as they are all very colourful and creative. I also like how you have set everything up very well too. The first image, could you make the eyes closed? If so, then maybe you could do that to make it even better!
This reminds me of something like this which I also saw and it was very similar to the one that you have done, probably because your class had to do it. Could you have picked something else apart from getting ready for school? If so, why did you pick to do this topic?
I think that to improve, maybe you could add something that you had found challenging or something that you enjoyed the most!
Awesome work!
Looking forward to your next posts,
Parwin