One day there was a man named Jim he lived in new York. (At Night) Jim was sleeping he heard a BIG HUGE NOISE!! He said what was that? He looks out his window but there was nothing so then he went outside to see what it was. He said where is every body!? He said Hmm lets go look around...When he was walking around he felt AN EARTHQUAKE!!! But it wasn’t really an Earthquake. It was NEW YORK IS FALLING!!!! He said Hello!!! But nobody responded he said HELLO SOMEBODY!! There was one person that responded she or he said HELLO!! So they both went towards the sound of the voices! (1 minute later) They find each other… Jim said Hello Who May You Be? She says I’m Evie You? Jim says I’m Jim! Jim says Nice to meet you Eve! Evie says Nice to meet you to Jim! They both looked at each other for a few seconds.. Evie says we should find a way out. So they tryed to find a way out. Then they saw another person they went up to the person… Jim said Hello… Evie said Hi… The person said hello back… Jim said oh no it looks like…. NEW YORK IS FALLING AGAIN!They quaickly RAN and they find some where. It wasn’t just some where it was a little cave with nothing inside they stayed there untill NEW YORK STOPS FALLING…. (1 Hour Later) Jim says to Evie and the other person I think we can go out. They make there way out of the little cave when they get out of the cave Jim says OH NO THE STAUTE OF LIBERTY :O ITS GONE He runs over to the staute of liberty and sees her head Evie says Noooooo The staute of liberty!!! The other person said :O The person says I think I should show you who I am Evie and Jim said I guess.. The person shows his or her self. Jim says Awwe its a cute little girl Evie says yeah! Evie and Jim say I think we should look for a safe place Jim says but… The staute of liberty we can’t leave her here? They say Jim you are right where should we put her? Jims says I think we should leave her so they left her. Jim and Evie got married and keeped the kid that they found and had to other kids!That where twins! The kid that they found was the oldest the other to kids where twins!!!
Well done Nevaeh on writing such a imaginative story.I'm glad Jim and Evie found a cave to shelter in.
ReplyDeleteJust remember that when people are talking we need to use speech marks to show what the character is saying.